First off, I like your web design. I like how there is a picture at the top, as well as one specific to the introduction.
I have not heard of this story before, so I am excited to see where this goes. Your introduction was very to the point, without a lot of flourish or flowery words. I like its straight forwardness, but it is almost hard to comment on because it is so short. I am not sure if you will expand things mentioned here in the rest of your storybook or not, but it might be useful to, if you are not already planning to do so. I am very intrigued at Gilgamesh’s beginning, how he came into a position that would allow him to be both a hero and a tyrant. I am also intrigued by the clay doll. Who made it? Why? Was it created purposefully for Gilgamesh? I hope I get to find out the answers to these in your writing!
The overall presentation of your storybook looks great. The photo at the top of the introduction really draws the readers in. I also really like the format of the text - how it is centered in the middle of the page under the photo. I think this setup really works for your story.
Regarding the story itself, I think it is definitely going to be interesting to read. I am unfamiliar with both of the characters that you mention, but your introduction really gives me an idea of what these characters were like. It contains some good background information. I also like the formatting of your sentences; some sentences are short fragments, which adds to the overall tone of the introduction.
The main question I have is about Enkidu. There is not a lot of information about him in the introduction. I was wondering if he was the clay doll you mentioned? I feel like this sort of vagueness is part of your attempt to draw readers in, which is great! But I also feel like you might want to include just a little more background about Enkidu in particular so your readers are prepared for the stories you will tell. Overall, I really like it so far, and I look forward to keeping up with the rest of your stories!
Hi Jason! I really like that you will be doing a storybook over Gilgamesh. I’ve always heard things about Gilgamesh being referenced. Namely because he is the oldest hero in recorded history but I am happy that I will get a chance to learn more about him from your storybook. I really like your banner image of the stone tablet. It really helps the reader understand how old Gilgamesh’s story really is. However, I do not know if I would use it as your banner image for both the Homepage and the introduction. What if you got a different picture from the introduction or perhaps you used the second picture you have in the introduction as your banner image? I was very impressed that you went with a different formatting style for your introduction. While I do like it for being out of the box and different I thought it was a bit hard to read. Left justifying it might make it easier to read or you could just leave it the way it is.
Unfortunately, there aren't many pictures relevant to Gilgamesh and Enkidu, and I'm not particularly good at relating pictures indirectly to themes. But thanks for the feedback.
Just looking at the website I like the theme you have going on! I like it when websites look cohesively put together! Good job with that! I like the pictures! I like how you explain what a tyrant is in your introduction, it really shows that you're going in depth with every detail. I'm intrigued by "this growth of character was compelled by another." It makes me want to know more. I think you're Introduction is really good. You introduce everything without giving the audience too much detail too soon. I like the layout where it's split up and not just one paragraph because it really emphasizes each introduction. Your sentence structure is fairly broken up; maybe try using more detail in each sentence to really offer more depth! Overall, I think this project is going to be very interesting. I'm excited to read more of the stories. Great job!
Hi Jason, I really love the style you've picked here! It reads almost like a movie trailer, with the short sentences that really build suspense. I do have a few small recommendations for you, but they are pretty technical in nature, because I think your introduction is pretty good as it is already! Firstly I would consider changing how the text is laid out. I can see why you chose centered text for this style, but on certain screen sizes it can begin to affect readability and can really take out immersion. Another thing that may help with this is being very careful with sentence and word length. This can be pretty annoying, but when using as much style as you are, it may be necessary. Regardless of how or if you change the layout, I really love the content and style, and if you can't make it work in a better format, i would just leave it. What you have is too good to change for the reader's sake.
Hi Jason, I really enjoy the style of writing you've chose. You have effectively controlled the cadence of your story with this method. When you say "facets", I'm not sure that is the most accurate word. Usually the word 'facet' is used to describe an institution or principle rather than a person. I also missed your Author's Note which I think would have helped to explain the story you were retelling. I think you did a great job of pulling the reader into your story, which can be hard to do at times, but I was very intrigued at the end of your Introduction. Also, I really enjoy the layout of your website and the pictures you have chosen. I' excited to read about the paradoxical hero of your story. It seems like the nature of this character will allow you to explore many different themes concerning leadership. Great job!
Hi Jason. I really enjoyed the introduction to your storybook. I know a bit about the Epic of Gilgamesh, although it's definitely not the most familiar story to me, and it seems like you have a really interesting take on the characters. I'm excited to see how you explore the contrasting characteristics and reputations of Gilgamesh as both a hero and a tyrant. It seems like you're going to be focussing on his character development and the way his relationship with Enkidu plays into that development, which I think is a great take on the story. The centered text is cool aesthetically speaking, but I found it a little hard to read. Not saying you should change it, since it does look good, but you might want to think about the importance of looks vs easy scanning in your writing.
Jason, I like the small statement that you put on the homepage of the site. It is succinct but pulls you in with a cliffhanger. I also like the image you have on the homepage, I think it is perfect for the tone you are trying to set. -You might consider rewording the second sentence of your introduction: Oppressed and treating your people as if they had no freedoms is kind of redundant -I like how your introduction focuses on the dual and conflicting nature of Gilgamesh - I also liked your story, it was intriguing and it makes me want to read more. It was clear and I believe you gave enough background information in order for me to understand what was going on without having to have read the original story. I would have liked to see more expressive dialogue to add a little more emotion. All in all, great job!
Jason, I thought your subject for your project was interesting, taking us back to the original hero story and showing us the dichotomy presented even back then. Your use of title images in your website adds background, I was wondering if maybe as a way to add a bit more color to your text you could add even more images, such as a mesopotamiam clay doll when talking about the creation of Enkidu. This would, in my opinion, be a great addition to the word pictures you already have created. I really liked the way you spaced your story, it really set the tone for scene changes, and the introductory thought gave us strong insight into the current subjects thoughts. This style is unique among projects I have read, and one of my personal favorites. I hope to see it continued in your future project work.
Jason, I think it’s really cool that you chose to do your project on Gilgamesh! My girlfriend has gotten me to try watching anime, and Gilgamesh is actually a character in the series she’s had me start, so this is surprisingly relevant! The site looks great, and I love your first story! Enkidu’s analysis of Gilgamesh was so interesting and astute, and you did a great job of showing us how the characters challenge each other. I also thought the way you had Gilgamesh accept Enkidu’s criticism and decide to learn from it helped to illustrate how he is not always a tyrant. I did, however, think your story could perhaps use more physical description. I found myself very curious about what Enkidu, Ukhut, and Gilgamesh looked like as well as what Gilgamesh’s palace was like. As a tyrant who imposes morality upon his people, is he ascetic, excessive, somewhere in between? This might be worth exploring either in revisions to this story or in future writing about Gilgamesh. I will definitely be coming back to this site to see what you add next!
Jason, Your overall presentation is great! Your banner images really compliment the theme of your project and fit the website nicely. I also think your topic of Gilgamesh is unique and cool! Your introduction was nicely written and you did a really good job of explaining what it would be about, and the background information we needed in order to read more. I was really intrigued to read your first story! At the beginning of your story "Friendship" you really made Gilgamesh sound like an evil guy! I was intrigued by who this "hero" may be. You did a really great job with the rest of the story and describing how the characters battled each other! I really liked how Gilgamesh was able to learn from Enkidu. Great job and I'm looking forward to reading more!
Hello Jason! I am reading your storybook for the Indian Epics course. I really liked the concept for your storybook. The idea of re-telling an ancient tale like that of Gilgamesh is no easy task, but you do a great job of it. You really did a good job at making Gilgamesh seem evil, especially throughout the beginning of 'Friendship'. And even in just these two small stories, you have done well to show Gilgamesh's intent, and why he does what he does. It is an excellent way to show that he is more than just a tyrant. While I liked the way you put in a timeskip to the aftermath of the bull attempting to attack the city in 'Failure', a little more details on what was happening would have been good. I was a little confused as to what was going on, and just a few more sentences of descriptions would have sufficed to clean up the flow of the story in that section. Overall, I really liked your story and I thought it was very excellent!
Hi Jason great job on your storybook so far! I'm taking the Indian Epics course this semester, so I really like your introduction because it does a great job of explaining the background for your storybook. The first part of your story does a great job of setting up how Enkidu got to this world and why he is in the story to begin with. Your first two stories also have good examples showing the bad intentions of Gilgamesh throughout the course of the storybook. One thing I would recommend is providing a little bit more background into the second story. Some characters are introduced quickly without a lot of explaination and some of the actions of the characters are thrown into the story without much background either. Such as the killing of the bull. Great job on your storybook so far I look forward to reading more.
Hi Jason! I like that you're focusing on Gilgamesh and Enkidu's friendship in your storybook, and the way you tell the story of their first meeting shows how their connection was very strong right from the beginning. Each of them had a strong emotional reaction to meeting the other, and even though they may have been scary or unsettling emotions they feel a need to push past that and build a friendship.
I thought "Failure" was engaging to read, and I like that you used different parts of the epic to create your own story. I was a little confused though about how Gilgamesh defeated the bull. I feel like the reader needs a little clearer explanation that Ishtar set a monstrous bull loose on the city and Gilgamesh killed it because when Enkidu dropped the entrails on Ishtar I was wondering where they came from.
I really like your choice of picture for your header, and the theme works very well. It's simple and clean, and I think the black, white and blue work well for an adventure tale.
Hi Jason! Great storybook, your introduction does an excellent job not only of bringing the reader up to speed with the myth but also introducing your take on the legend. I had no Idea Gilgamesh was the first recorded hero, and the image that you use for your banner is great at reminding me of that context as I read through the stories.
The first story sets the whole thing off to a great start, and I love the way you execute several perspectives. The scenes feel really fleshed out and I am able to get inside every character’s head. The transition from the first to second stories felt a little jarring because of the jump ahead in time, but looking back on it I think you made a good call. I was under the impression that the two were going to duke it out after the first story, so when they acted like friends in the next one I was a little confused. I really enjoyed this storybook!
Hey there Jason! This was my first chance getting to read anything from your portfolio, though I think I've read some of your shorter stories before. Just looking through your stories, either you are a really good writer or you are really good at taking the advice people give you and improving yourself. I was always impressed with your work. One thing I found particularly impressive was how well you managed the amount of details. Your stories were always detailed enough to be intriguing to the reader, but never so dense that the reader got bogged down in the details. I was always very impressed with this delicate balancing act. I hope that I get to read more of your work as the semester continues. I want to wish you good luck with the rest of the class, and I hope you have fun writing the rest of your stories!
Hi Jason! I really like how Enkidu is given such importance in your story. It's true that most stories from the epic revolve around Gilgamesh and his character, so it is nice to see the other hero getting some well-deserved attention! My biggest problem, although your story seems well-thought and interesting, is that the writing is a little choppy. Most of it is one-line paragraphs, although that may just be your style, however it makes the story feel fast-paced and rushed. Evening out your paragraphs will give the story an aesthetic/appearance body but this appearance will help the reader read with more intent as opposed to rushing. However, if you like it, then by all means do you! I really like what's going on so far and I can't wait to see more.
Hi Jason, I really enjoyed reading your story! Even though you mentioned it was more of a summary than you would have liked, the feeling of fear was clearly presented and very relatable. Death is a phenomenon that is filled with uncertainty. Like Enkidu mentioned, its not something he can properly fight or defeat. It did seem a little convenient that the first person he thought of had the answer to his problem. It would have been more interesting if he had tried one or two other options before reaching out to his elder. With that being said, I really enjoyed the layout of your website. The image you had in the "Loss of a Companion" story fits perfectly with your story. It even made me think of Greek mythology and the river styx. Lastly, I liked the incorporation of the snake in the end. It adds to the unpredictability of life, much like how death is uncertain. Great job on this story! I look forward to reading more!
I really enjoyed your story! I think it's interesting that you broke you story apart by individual sentences. It caused the reader to pause between each sentence which created a unique cadence in your story. I think this cadence helped to show the tone of the story. Your author's notes are really helpful in providing insight to the reader. You've done a great job clarifying the story and expanding on the explanations for many different parts of the story. I thought it was really interesting that Gilgamesh’s mourning turned into an intense fear of death that drove him to go on a mission to become immortal. It’s cool that you made a snake the destroyer of his immortality. Although it was indirectly, snakes typically represent the underworld or ‘fall of man’ so it was a great tie to have a snake reclaim the man’s mortal life in a sense.
Hey Jason, First of all, great stories! I thoroughly enjoyed looking at your blog. They are great stories. The pictures and the background really make the stories easy to think about and your lay out is completely easy to look through and get around. My favorite story is your third one where you talk about the guy in the football team. I think that is really funny and it adds an element of fun to your blog! Also, the author's notes makes sense of the story really interesting and I can see why you chose the stories. THanks for sharing and I look forward to reading more stories from you! I'm from the Indian Epics class so this is great reading these different stories!
Hey Jason! Somehow I have not read your site before today! I am so glad I found it. I really enjoyed your stories and the look of your website. I also love your blog. You have done a really awesome job at explaining your stories and retelling them. I like how you have titled the pages on your site based on the main theme of each story. The one word page titles look really nice across the top, but using the powerful words hook the readers and interest us enough to click the pages are read the stories. Overall, really nice work. Your writing style is very nice, easy to read, and has a nice natural flow to it.
I really liked the design of your website! The names for each of your stories were well-named in my opinion. I also enjoyed that you had many stories added to your portfolio! One thing that could be changed would be the banner images at the top of each page. For the Home and Intro pages, it doesn't matter too much if they are the same. However, in other projects I've seen, the banner images that fit the theme or narrative of the story they are writing about seem to add even more depth to the story itself! Although it may be hard to find images that directly fit Gilgamesh and Enkidu's story. In any case, the progression of Gilgamesh and Enkidu's story throughout your project was well done! Each of the stories were definitely longer than most of the stories I have read, but they were very well done and an enjoyable read!
Hi Jason!
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I like your web design. I like how there is a picture at the top, as well as one specific to the introduction.
I have not heard of this story before, so I am excited to see where this goes. Your introduction was very to the point, without a lot of flourish or flowery words. I like its straight forwardness, but it is almost hard to comment on because it is so short. I am not sure if you will expand things mentioned here in the rest of your storybook or not, but it might be useful to, if you are not already planning to do so. I am very intrigued at Gilgamesh’s beginning, how he came into a position that would allow him to be both a hero and a tyrant. I am also intrigued by the clay doll. Who made it? Why? Was it created purposefully for Gilgamesh? I hope I get to find out the answers to these in your writing!
Hi Jason,
ReplyDeleteThe overall presentation of your storybook looks great. The photo at the top of the introduction really draws the readers in. I also really like the format of the text - how it is centered in the middle of the page under the photo. I think this setup really works for your story.
Regarding the story itself, I think it is definitely going to be interesting to read. I am unfamiliar with both of the characters that you mention, but your introduction really gives me an idea of what these characters were like. It contains some good background information. I also like the formatting of your sentences; some sentences are short fragments, which adds to the overall tone of the introduction.
The main question I have is about Enkidu. There is not a lot of information about him in the introduction. I was wondering if he was the clay doll you mentioned? I feel like this sort of vagueness is part of your attempt to draw readers in, which is great! But I also feel like you might want to include just a little more background about Enkidu in particular so your readers are prepared for the stories you will tell. Overall, I really like it so far, and I look forward to keeping up with the rest of your stories!
Hi Jason! I really like that you will be doing a storybook over Gilgamesh. I’ve always heard things about Gilgamesh being referenced. Namely because he is the oldest hero in recorded history but I am happy that I will get a chance to learn more about him from your storybook. I really like your banner image of the stone tablet. It really helps the reader understand how old Gilgamesh’s story really is. However, I do not know if I would use it as your banner image for both the Homepage and the introduction. What if you got a different picture from the introduction or perhaps you used the second picture you have in the introduction as your banner image? I was very impressed that you went with a different formatting style for your introduction. While I do like it for being out of the box and different I thought it was a bit hard to read. Left justifying it might make it easier to read or you could just leave it the way it is.
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately, there aren't many pictures relevant to Gilgamesh and Enkidu, and I'm not particularly good at relating pictures indirectly to themes. But thanks for the feedback.
DeleteHey Jason!
ReplyDeleteJust looking at the website I like the theme you have going on! I like it when websites look cohesively put together! Good job with that! I like the pictures! I like how you explain what a tyrant is in your introduction, it really shows that you're going in depth with every detail. I'm intrigued by "this growth of character was compelled by another." It makes me want to know more. I think you're Introduction is really good. You introduce everything without giving the audience too much detail too soon. I like the layout where it's split up and not just one paragraph because it really emphasizes each introduction. Your sentence structure is fairly broken up; maybe try using more detail in each sentence to really offer more depth! Overall, I think this project is going to be very interesting. I'm excited to read more of the stories. Great job!
Hi Jason, I really love the style you've picked here! It reads almost like a movie trailer, with the short sentences that really build suspense. I do have a few small recommendations for you, but they are pretty technical in nature, because I think your introduction is pretty good as it is already! Firstly I would consider changing how the text is laid out. I can see why you chose centered text for this style, but on certain screen sizes it can begin to affect readability and can really take out immersion. Another thing that may help with this is being very careful with sentence and word length. This can be pretty annoying, but when using as much style as you are, it may be necessary. Regardless of how or if you change the layout, I really love the content and style, and if you can't make it work in a better format, i would just leave it. What you have is too good to change for the reader's sake.
ReplyDeleteHi Jason, I really enjoy the style of writing you've chose. You have effectively controlled the cadence of your story with this method. When you say "facets", I'm not sure that is the most accurate word. Usually the word 'facet' is used to describe an institution or principle rather than a person. I also missed your Author's Note which I think would have helped to explain the story you were retelling. I think you did a great job of pulling the reader into your story, which can be hard to do at times, but I was very intrigued at the end of your Introduction. Also, I really enjoy the layout of your website and the pictures you have chosen. I' excited to read about the paradoxical hero of your story. It seems like the nature of this character will allow you to explore many different themes concerning leadership.
ReplyDeleteGreat job!
Hi Jason. I really enjoyed the introduction to your storybook. I know a bit about the Epic of Gilgamesh, although it's definitely not the most familiar story to me, and it seems like you have a really interesting take on the characters. I'm excited to see how you explore the contrasting characteristics and reputations of Gilgamesh as both a hero and a tyrant. It seems like you're going to be focussing on his character development and the way his relationship with Enkidu plays into that development, which I think is a great take on the story. The centered text is cool aesthetically speaking, but I found it a little hard to read. Not saying you should change it, since it does look good, but you might want to think about the importance of looks vs easy scanning in your writing.
ReplyDeleteJason, I like the small statement that you put on the homepage of the site. It is succinct but pulls you in with a cliffhanger. I also like the image you have on the homepage, I think it is perfect for the tone you are trying to set.
ReplyDelete-You might consider rewording the second sentence of your introduction: Oppressed and treating your people as if they had no freedoms is kind of redundant
-I like how your introduction focuses on the dual and conflicting nature of Gilgamesh
- I also liked your story, it was intriguing and it makes me want to read more. It was clear and I believe you gave enough background information in order for me to understand what was going on without having to have read the original story. I would have liked to see more expressive dialogue to add a little more emotion. All in all, great job!
Jason, I thought your subject for your project was interesting, taking us back to the original hero story and showing us the dichotomy presented even back then. Your use of title images in your website adds background, I was wondering if maybe as a way to add a bit more color to your text you could add even more images, such as a mesopotamiam clay doll when talking about the creation of Enkidu. This would, in my opinion, be a great addition to the word pictures you already have created. I really liked the way you spaced your story, it really set the tone for scene changes, and the introductory thought gave us strong insight into the current subjects thoughts. This style is unique among projects I have read, and one of my personal favorites. I hope to see it continued in your future project work.
ReplyDeleteJason, I think it’s really cool that you chose to do your project on Gilgamesh! My girlfriend has gotten me to try watching anime, and Gilgamesh is actually a character in the series she’s had me start, so this is surprisingly relevant! The site looks great, and I love your first story! Enkidu’s analysis of Gilgamesh was so interesting and astute, and you did a great job of showing us how the characters challenge each other. I also thought the way you had Gilgamesh accept Enkidu’s criticism and decide to learn from it helped to illustrate how he is not always a tyrant. I did, however, think your story could perhaps use more physical description. I found myself very curious about what Enkidu, Ukhut, and Gilgamesh looked like as well as what Gilgamesh’s palace was like. As a tyrant who imposes morality upon his people, is he ascetic, excessive, somewhere in between? This might be worth exploring either in revisions to this story or in future writing about Gilgamesh. I will definitely be coming back to this site to see what you add next!
ReplyDeleteJason,
ReplyDeleteYour overall presentation is great! Your banner images really compliment the theme of your project and fit the website nicely. I also think your topic of Gilgamesh is unique and cool!
Your introduction was nicely written and you did a really good job of explaining what it would be about, and the background information we needed in order to read more. I was really intrigued to read your first story!
At the beginning of your story "Friendship" you really made Gilgamesh sound like an evil guy! I was intrigued by who this "hero" may be. You did a really great job with the rest of the story and describing how the characters battled each other! I really liked how Gilgamesh was able to learn from Enkidu. Great job and I'm looking forward to reading more!
Hello Jason! I am reading your storybook for the Indian Epics course. I really liked the concept for your storybook. The idea of re-telling an ancient tale like that of Gilgamesh is no easy task, but you do a great job of it. You really did a good job at making Gilgamesh seem evil, especially throughout the beginning of 'Friendship'. And even in just these two small stories, you have done well to show Gilgamesh's intent, and why he does what he does. It is an excellent way to show that he is more than just a tyrant. While I liked the way you put in a timeskip to the aftermath of the bull attempting to attack the city in 'Failure', a little more details on what was happening would have been good. I was a little confused as to what was going on, and just a few more sentences of descriptions would have sufficed to clean up the flow of the story in that section. Overall, I really liked your story and I thought it was very excellent!
ReplyDeleteHi Jason great job on your storybook so far! I'm taking the Indian Epics course this semester, so I really like your introduction because it does a great job of explaining the background for your storybook. The first part of your story does a great job of setting up how Enkidu got to this world and why he is in the story to begin with. Your first two stories also have good examples showing the bad intentions of Gilgamesh throughout the course of the storybook. One thing I would recommend is providing a little bit more background into the second story. Some characters are introduced quickly without a lot of explaination and some of the actions of the characters are thrown into the story without much background either. Such as the killing of the bull. Great job on your storybook so far I look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteHi Jason! I like that you're focusing on Gilgamesh and Enkidu's friendship in your storybook, and the way you tell the story of their first meeting shows how their connection was very strong right from the beginning. Each of them had a strong emotional reaction to meeting the other, and even though they may have been scary or unsettling emotions they feel a need to push past that and build a friendship.
ReplyDeleteI thought "Failure" was engaging to read, and I like that you used different parts of the epic to create your own story. I was a little confused though about how Gilgamesh defeated the bull. I feel like the reader needs a little clearer explanation that Ishtar set a monstrous bull loose on the city and Gilgamesh killed it because when Enkidu dropped the entrails on Ishtar I was wondering where they came from.
I really like your choice of picture for your header, and the theme works very well. It's simple and clean, and I think the black, white and blue work well for an adventure tale.
Hi Jason! Great storybook, your introduction does an excellent job not only of bringing the reader up to speed with the myth but also introducing your take on the legend. I had no Idea Gilgamesh was the first recorded hero, and the image that you use for your banner is great at reminding me of that context as I read through the stories.
ReplyDeleteThe first story sets the whole thing off to a great start, and I love the way you execute several perspectives. The scenes feel really fleshed out and I am able to get inside every character’s head. The transition from the first to second stories felt a little jarring because of the jump ahead in time, but looking back on it I think you made a good call. I was under the impression that the two were going to duke it out after the first story, so when they acted like friends in the next one I was a little confused. I really enjoyed this storybook!
Hey there Jason! This was my first chance getting to read anything from your portfolio, though I think I've read some of your shorter stories before. Just looking through your stories, either you are a really good writer or you are really good at taking the advice people give you and improving yourself. I was always impressed with your work. One thing I found particularly impressive was how well you managed the amount of details. Your stories were always detailed enough to be intriguing to the reader, but never so dense that the reader got bogged down in the details. I was always very impressed with this delicate balancing act. I hope that I get to read more of your work as the semester continues. I want to wish you good luck with the rest of the class, and I hope you have fun writing the rest of your stories!
ReplyDeleteHi Jason! I really like how Enkidu is given such importance in your story. It's true that most stories from the epic revolve around Gilgamesh and his character, so it is nice to see the other hero getting some well-deserved attention! My biggest problem, although your story seems well-thought and interesting, is that the writing is a little choppy. Most of it is one-line paragraphs, although that may just be your style, however it makes the story feel fast-paced and rushed. Evening out your paragraphs will give the story an aesthetic/appearance body but this appearance will help the reader read with more intent as opposed to rushing. However, if you like it, then by all means do you! I really like what's going on so far and I can't wait to see more.
ReplyDeleteHi Jason, I really enjoyed reading your story! Even though you mentioned it was more of a summary than you would have liked, the feeling of fear was clearly presented and very relatable. Death is a phenomenon that is filled with uncertainty. Like Enkidu mentioned, its not something he can properly fight or defeat. It did seem a little convenient that the first person he thought of had the answer to his problem. It would have been more interesting if he had tried one or two other options before reaching out to his elder. With that being said, I really enjoyed the layout of your website. The image you had in the "Loss of a Companion" story fits perfectly with your story. It even made me think of Greek mythology and the river styx. Lastly, I liked the incorporation of the snake in the end. It adds to the unpredictability of life, much like how death is uncertain. Great job on this story! I look forward to reading more!
ReplyDeleteHi Jason,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story! I think it's interesting that you broke you story apart by individual sentences. It caused the reader to pause between each sentence which created a unique cadence in your story. I think this cadence helped to show the tone of the story. Your author's notes are really helpful in providing insight to the reader. You've done a great job clarifying the story and expanding on the explanations for many different parts of the story. I thought it was really interesting that Gilgamesh’s mourning turned into an intense fear of death that drove him to go on a mission to become immortal. It’s cool that you made a snake the destroyer of his immortality. Although it was indirectly, snakes typically represent the underworld or ‘fall of man’ so it was a great tie to have a snake reclaim the man’s mortal life in a sense.
Overall, great job!
Hey Jason,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, great stories! I thoroughly enjoyed looking at your blog. They are great stories. The pictures and the background really make the stories easy to think about and your lay out is completely easy to look through and get around. My favorite story is your third one where you talk about the guy in the football team. I think that is really funny and it adds an element of fun to your blog! Also, the author's notes makes sense of the story really interesting and I can see why you chose the stories. THanks for sharing and I look forward to reading more stories from you! I'm from the Indian Epics class so this is great reading these different stories!
Hey Jason!
ReplyDeleteSomehow I have not read your site before today! I am so glad I found it. I really enjoyed your stories and the look of your website. I also love your blog. You have done a really awesome job at explaining your stories and retelling them. I like how you have titled the pages on your site based on the main theme of each story. The one word page titles look really nice across the top, but using the powerful words hook the readers and interest us enough to click the pages are read the stories. Overall, really nice work. Your writing style is very nice, easy to read, and has a nice natural flow to it.
Hey Jason,
ReplyDeleteI really liked the design of your website! The names for each of your stories were well-named in my opinion. I also enjoyed that you had many stories added to your portfolio! One thing that could be changed would be the banner images at the top of each page. For the Home and Intro pages, it doesn't matter too much if they are the same. However, in other projects I've seen, the banner images that fit the theme or narrative of the story they are writing about seem to add even more depth to the story itself! Although it may be hard to find images that directly fit Gilgamesh and Enkidu's story. In any case, the progression of Gilgamesh and Enkidu's story throughout your project was well done! Each of the stories were definitely longer than most of the stories I have read, but they were very well done and an enjoyable read!